Feature-style story form easy as 1-2-3

Strathcona County masters ‘stack of boxes’ structure

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Feature-style story form easy as 1-2-3

Feature-style story structure is simple Just stack three boxes. Image from iStock

Just think back to what your third-grade English teacher taught you. Most pieces of writing have three sections:

  1. Introduction: the beginning
  2. Body: the middle
  3. Conclusion: the end

That makes writing a feature story as easy as 1-2-3.

A fill-in-the-boxes structure

Draw these three sections on a piece of paper, and your story looks like this:

OK, so it’s not quite that easy. Because each of those sections has its own parts.

This simple, elegant structure still works for virtually everything but bad news, crisis communications or communications distributed via telegraph.

So what goes into each box?

1. Introduction

The introduction has three parts: the lead, the nut graph and sometimes a background section.

A. Lead. The job of the lead is to grab readers and pull them into your piece. (Repeat after me: The job of the lead is not to tell the whole story. That’s what the whole story is for.) To do that, make your lead:

  • Concrete, or tangible. Is it something you can process through your five senses? Is it packed with concrete details? Or is it a startling statistic? If so, you’re good.
  • Creative. Have you stolen a trick from the fiction writers? Are you using techniques like anecdote, human interest or metaphor? If so, you’re even better.
  • Provocative. For bonus points: Have you raised a question in the reader’s mind that she can only answer by reading the rest of your piece? (There’s a big difference between raising a question and asking one. The reader is the one who should be asking the question.) If so, you’re awesome!

In one of my favorite befores-and-afters ever, here’s a lead by Elizabeth Tadman-Kickham, a communication specialist for Strathcona County, Canada, before applying the feature-style story structure:

The Canada 55+ Games are coming to Strathcona County, Alberta this summer from August 27 to 30. The Canada 55+ Games is a nation wide program that promotes spiritual, mental and physical wellness among Canadians 55 years of age and older. Not just your average sporting event, the Canada 55+ Games features competition in 24 different sports and events ranging from swimming and hockey to scrabble and bocce.

And here’s that lead after mastering this approach:

Florence Storch is a 101-year-old Alberta woman with a unique hobby and a lofty goal. A javelin thrower, Florence has her sights set on winning a gold medal at the Canada 55+ Games.

I’ve shared this before-and-after with probably 5,000 people in nearly 100 writing workshops, and only three people have ever preferred the original.

B. Nut graph. In this paragraph, you’ll:

  • Put the story into a nutshell, communicating your key message. After getting readers’ attention with a shiny object in the lead, tell them where you’re taking them in the nut graph.
  • Make a promise to the reader, letting them know what’s in it for them: If you read this, you will learn how to …
  • Summarize your story in a sentence or two. Here’s where you tell ’em what you’re going to tell ’em.

So, how did Elizabeth Tadman-Kickham do? She didn’t write a nut graph for her original news story, because inverted pyramids don’t have nut graphs

Here’s the nut graph in her rewrite:

This summer, Florence and 2000 other competitors from across Canada will have their chance at gold right here in Strathcona County, and you can come cheer them on.

C. Background section. Also known as the blah blah blah, the background section broadens the story out. The background section is where to place:

  • Definitions. Want to include the boilerplate of your product or company? Get the lead out of the lead and move the definition to the third paragraph.
  • Broader context. Think of your lead as a close-up. The background section is a wide shot. Answer the reader’s question, “Why are you telling me this story now?”
  • History or trends. Don’t start your story with a history lesson — or even a trend. If you’re on the 4th phase of a 44-phase project, don’t drone on about it in the lead. Save it for the third paragraph.

Elizabeth Tadman-Kickham’s original story didn’t have a background section. Inverted pyramids don’t have them, and she’d used up all of her background in that (definition) lead.

Here’s the background section in her rewrite:

The Canada 55+ Games is a nation-wide program that promotes spiritual, mental and physical wellness among Canadians 55 years of age and older. Not just your average sporting event, the Games features competition in 24 different sports and events ranging from swimming and hockey to scrabble and bocce.

I love that last phrase, Elizabeth!

2. Body

If the nut graph is where you tell ’em what you’re going to tell ’em, the body is where you tell them.

Body

Avoid the muddle in the middle: Make sure the body has parts.

And move it along: The brisker, the better.

Here’s the body of Elizabeth Tadman-Kickham’s original piece:

With 2000 participants from across the country, 300 of their family members and 550 volunteers registered, the Games are set to be the largest Canada 55+ Games in the program’s 18-year history! The Games are truly a four-day celebration of sport, culture and social well being and feature a number of free events that are open to the public including:

Opening Ceremonies Fireworks – weather permitting

  • Wednesday, August 27 at 10 p.m.
  • Public viewing at the Kinsmen Leisure Centre
  • 2001 Oak Street, Sherwood Park.

55+ Health & Wellness Expo

  • Thursday, August 28 from noon to 8 p.m.
  • Millennium Place
  • 2000 Premier Way, Sherwood Park

Ardrossan Mini Art Market – weather permitting

  • Thursday, August 28 from 11 a.m. to 3 p.m.
  • Ardrossan Recreation Complex
  • 80-1 Avenue, Ardrossan

Art: Objet de Sport, an exhibit celebrating Canadian and Olympic sport and recreation.

  • On until September 6
  • Gallery@501
  • #120, 501 Festival Avenue

Her rewrite is much tighter and invites readers in:

The Games will be held in Strathcona County from August 27 to 30 and are set to be the largest Canada 55+ Games in the program’s eighteen-year history. Come out, be inspired, and enjoy the festivities including:

  • August 27 – Opening Ceremonies Fireworks at Broadmoor Lake Park
  • August 28 – 55+ Health & Wellness Expo at Millennium Place
  • August 28 – Ardrossan Mini Art Market at Ardrossan Recreation Complex
  • July 10 to September 6 – Art: Objet de Sport at Gallery@501

3. Conclusion

The conclusion has two parts: a wrapup and a kicker.

Conclusion

A. Wrapup. If the nut graph is where you tell ’em what you’re going to tell ’em, and the body is where you tell ’em, then the wrapup is where you tell ’em what you told ’em.

Tip: Copy your nut graph, paste it into the conclusion and massage. That’s all you need for your wrapup.

Elizabeth Tadman-Kickham’s original wrapup:

Come cheer on the nation from August 27 to 30 in Strathcona County! For more information on the events listed above and the full Games sport and activity competition schedule, visit our website or call 780-467-2211.

Her revision is a bit more streamlined:

You can find sport schedules, cultural events and volunteer opportunities for the Canada 55+ Games by visiting our website or calling 780-467-2211.

B. Kicker. To leave a lasting impression, go with something that’s concrete, creative and provocative. That’s right — everything that works for a lead works just as well for a kicker.

The great thing about inverted pyramids is that when you get to the end, you just stop typing. That’s why Elizabeth Tadman-Kickham didn’t include a kicker.

But features require an ending. Here’s the kicker from Elizabeth’s rewrite:

Don’t let their age fool you; the competitors in these Games are here to win!

This to me is the least satisfying part of Elizabeth’s rewrite. I wish instead she had circled back to the top and quoted Florence Storch, that 101-year-old woman who’s running around with a pointed stick and knows how to use it. Maybe something like:

“Don’t let my age fool you,” Storch says. “I’m here to win!”

All in all, though, a fantastic rewrite. Congratulations, Elizabeth.

Let’s see yours! Please share your befores and afters in the comments section below.

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